Wednesday, June 08, 2005

Episode I

It was a cool spring Monday morning in Mammoth City. The sun struggled to shine on the massive skyscrapers and the people rushing to work, but only managed to pierce the thick cloud of pollution in a feeble sort of way. Business executives drove to their office buildings, children rode yellow buses to school, police officers sat down to their morning coffee and doughnuts, while gang members made sure their illegal weapons were in order before beginning the day's illegal activities.

At Mammoth State University, students with eight o'clock classes rose blearily from bed, dragging their way to the classrooms where they could sleep in the nice comfortable desks. A small minority of the students, known as geeks, had obtained sufficient amounts of sleep the previous night and were alert enough to take notes.

One particular geek was named Dennis Brown. He was an average MSU freshman, a computer science major with sixteen units of mostly gen ed classes. As he sat in his eight o'clock English Composition class, automatically transcribing the professor's lecture, his mind wandered to the meeting he had attended the previous Saturday. It was a gathering of peaceful-minded citizens who wanted to make organized effort to clean up the ubiquitous graffiti in their corner of the city. The meeting had been broken up by a group of gang members throwing rocks, who scattered when the police arrived. Only one of them was arrested, and as a minor he would likely be released unpunished. The graffiti was a way that the gangs marked their territory, and they didn't appreciate interference.

If only I could do something to really make a difference, Dennis thought. But what can I do? I'm just a college student. Even the police can't stop these gangs. Then he realized that his English professor was asking him a question, and postponed these dreary thoughts for another time.

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8 Comments:

At Wednesday, June 08, 2005 7:38:00 PM, Blogger Matt said...

Again I'm reminded of how much I enjoyed this solid opening. We have the gang member/police problem established. And the humourous line about the gang members and their illegal weapons sets the stage for similar humour and suspension of disbelief all present in this "comic book style."

 
At Thursday, June 09, 2005 9:49:00 AM, Blogger Fibonacci said...

The statements about college students, however, were completely factual.

 
At Thursday, June 09, 2005 10:39:00 AM, Blogger f8d90a said...

and the truth is often times the best humor

loved it!

~Christopher

 
At Monday, June 20, 2005 5:34:00 PM, Anonymous Anonymous said...

Dennis reminds me a lot of Peter Parker, sans the spider-like powers, but that's okay. It's still a good start, and there's a kind of ominous feeling to it. I like it.

 
At Tuesday, June 21, 2005 8:52:00 PM, Blogger Becky said...

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At Tuesday, June 21, 2005 8:55:00 PM, Blogger Becky said...

Great beginning! I expect that his will be fun to follow. It is great that you are already several chapters into the story, some writers are so slow getting their chapters written.

[Who is she talking about?]

Hint: "CHAPTER ONE: WAITING"

 
At Thursday, June 23, 2005 9:35:00 AM, Blogger Fibonacci said...

Kate...the similarity to Peter Parker was intentional. I liked that character.

 
At Thursday, June 23, 2005 8:53:00 PM, Anonymous Anonymous said...

Yeah, but it's kind of like a de-ja-vu feeling, like 'I know I've seen this guy somewhere before' but I don't mind becuase I like Peter Parker. too.

 

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